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cold tears by ~-tank:icon-tank:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Lyrical




im lost and looking for an excuse
a place to hide from all the abuse
my whispers deafen those who listen
quite the voices screaming within
the blood on the floor is now gone
emotions are completely withdrawn
crying can you even hear me?
comfort me, insincerely


lost my mind
lost my name
finding
everythings the same
lost my heart
lost my love
emotions
or lack thereof

the skies are grey my soul is numb
and i fear what i\'ve become
there\'s nothing here to believe in
yet i stop myself from ever leaving
i watch idle as life passes by
im left confused and asking why
no one cares to field my question
staring blankly at my reflection
i force myself into oppression
ignoring, forgetting my own confession


i\'ve lost my mind
what\'s my name
my soul is blinded
by the shame
i\'ve lost my love
where\'s my heart
no longer beating
or did it start?
©2003-2010 ~-tank
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Author's Comments

a song/poem i wrote tonight...i dont hate this one...comments appreciated

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~unheard-voice Apr 14, 2003, 8:45:18 PM
you have good reason not to hate this, its really well written. good work, keep it up.

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The soul: "when it breathes through [man's] intellect, it is genius; when it breathes through his will, it is virtue; when it flows through his affection, it is love."
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~savis Apr 14, 2003, 9:17:15 PM
Whoa, that was so amazingly good... I really hope you put a melody to this, coz I can feel that this wants to be sung... Very impressive

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~aprigel Apr 15, 2003, 6:35:30 AM
Ohhhhh
+fav
I love it.. There's really nothing more that I can say, I just love it. The words, the way it flows, everything.. :) (Smile)

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~angelscream Apr 15, 2003, 12:44:02 PM
nice work tank! I like it a lot, like savis said...I really hope you put a melody to it.
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~holy123 Apr 15, 2003, 1:41:50 PM
omg so good babe love it actually i sing it its really good as usual its a fave :) (Smile) smiles real big love you
kayla*~*~
dont wanna leave
im just sitting here
on this day of eve
dont leave me bring me a tear
lol its kinda stupid i got another poem now tho loves you

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~lockedinside Apr 15, 2003, 3:04:02 PM
I love it all the emotion the rhythem of it
the way it flows is awesome
*kudos to you
*applaudes*
+fav

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:tears:†Kyle Franklin†:tears:
:tears:†Grandpa Bob†:tears:
:tears:†Baby Jake Preston†:tears:
:tears:†Sierra Renee Follette†:tears:
:sadangel:R-I-P I miss you All:sadangel:

...+I can't cry all the time...cus it shouldn't hurt
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`rebelchic Apr 15, 2003, 3:44:46 PM
You've always had a way with rhyming and getting away with it.

Lucky bastard.

=p (Razz)

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~innocentintent Apr 15, 2003, 5:22:34 PM
oh, i love it. i may ask your permission to use it for a clas poetry presentation.

innocence

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~somethingsublime Apr 15, 2003, 7:31:57 PM
This is great! i really like it, and i'm gonna have to add it to my favorites :wink:
Heart

I love to write...it seems like that's all i really do anymore...
i have 2 names on here... both showmeyourscars and
somethingsublime

I'll definitely keep my eye on you.. this is good work!
Hug I Heart it!!

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Be easy with me, because I can be this unsteady...
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